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The sun stretches her caressing hands.
Balancing on the horizon, it seems.
Last rays of day scatter across the lands.

As through a glacier, the light gleams
Over meadows and memories past,
Dripping off cardinal's wings into azure streams.

Galloping alongside stallions unsurpassed,
Golden beams falling with prancing leaves
And slipping into cracks of canyons vast.

Shadow wraps around illumination like sleeves.
Billows as smoldering incense in sacred art.
The day has left, has hastened like ghosts and thieves.

Shade stands resolute and rampart.
Rapt with the veiled, vanquished moon.
Hidden in devious clouds, the waves devoid of heart.

Luna moths glow like enchanted rune.
Catatonic branches creak languid and livid.
Stillness will be overtaken soon.


II.
Rapturous applause is thunder; vivid
Echoes shake the stagnant air—
Bludgeoning and blasting what was once timid.

Rhythmic electricity fractures the sky with flare
To maze its way down, pricking Earth.
Stars hide their shine in such dark affair.

Chaos ensues henceforth.
Controlled by frostbitten winds, rain spins
And baptizes this world in forlorn rebirth.

Like Flamenco dancers, grass begins
To bend and curve in one accord.
Volcanic, this gale erupts from within.

Gouging and thrashing as a wicked sword,
Hills are left with scars and laceration.
No life has dared in this raging tempest stirred.

As a blooming carnation,
Fledglings stretch and shake back to life.
Followed by the rest of creation.

III.
As if removing a veil, lilies shed strife—
(Only remnants of the storm lie in puddles of debris.)
Bursting with bluebird harmony of lyre and fife.

Hues of ruby scintillate from apple trees.
Butterflies like careless gypsies dance
Through wind carrying the chorus of millions' jubilee.

Splendor of nature is captured in all but a glance.
Sunflowers turn to greet their coveted sphere
And remain lost in her captivating trance.

Fawns bow in grateful prayer
And in the sequoia kingdom they scurry
Not thinking about there, but relishing here.

Chasing invisible fairies,
Pups bite air and
Found treasures they bury.

Oak giants, across land, are spanned--
In humble communion they stand.
…It stormed last night.

I get very intimate when it comes to nature, I'm in love with it.

Anyway, a Terza Rima written for day 30 of #ProjectDFC

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I'd like some feedback on this one, I want to improve it :)

**DAILY DEVIATION?!**
I'm flabergasted! Until a few hours ago I didn't even know what a DD was until informed. I'm honored! A big thanks to :iconreflectionsinwater: for suggesting this and :iconbeccalicious: for the feature :)
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Sharing Communion Amongst Creation -DFC Day 30 by ~ThomasInTheClouds Suggester Writes: The natural imagery in this Terza Rima is just beautifully described and captured within here to describe passion and fantasy. ( Suggested by reflectionsinwater and Featured by Beccalicious )
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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ThomasInTheClouds Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :) I'm grateful beyond expressible language
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:thumbsup:
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Titanium-Alex Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
This is...pure amazing. It gave me tingles down my spine & goosebumps - I don't know how you can share such close-to-your-heart things here on dA, but this is a Daily Deviation well deserved, and I'm not at all sorry I saw it.
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ThomasInTheClouds Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :) I just now learned what a DD is, so I feel very undeserving, but very happy. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
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Titanium-Alex Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
Don't feel undeserving! This is...amazing!
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softcaramelkisses Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know nothing about 'Tera Rima' or traditional forms of poetry but this poem is masterly crafted and fluently spoken! Absolutly Beautiful in so many ways! I felt like I was in touch with American Indian's and their land and the environment, that surrounds them.This poem moved me inside. Thank you 'Thomas In The Clouds' :) Very impressive! I love it :) :) :)
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ThomasInTheClouds Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for the kind words! I'm glad I could incite so Muhammad emotion in you with this :)
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softcaramelkisses Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your most welcome! I look forward in reading more of your poetry as I came across your piece of writing through a group. Glad I looked you up! Keep up your beautifully crafted workmanship in your gift of writing! :) :) :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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