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January Verses IV

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       The embers we ignited
       Contrasted nostalgic nights
       Like a chiaroscuro masterpiece
       Bleeding from Picasso's
       Brush. You kissed me as if
       I was your only source of oxygen,
       And you were dying to live.

The air was nebulous
And thick. Even the
Fireflies found it difficult
To maintain steady
Illumination in the muddled
Midnight— Their luminosity
Evanescent and short-lived
As their frail lives.

       Down deep in the bowels
       Of affection, in the diamond mines
       Of love, we uncovered a
       Friendship that shone brighter
       Than the very sun itself.
       Tell me Love, when you pass by,
       Do the sunflowers follow?
1.12.13

I'd like some feedback on this… Was it a hit-and-miss? Was the contrast of light and dark cool or lame?
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haphazardmelody's avatar
I think the first stanza is my favorite with that gorgeous imagery. "Bleeding from Picasso's Brush" is just an amazing image to me. Love it. I liked the contrast between light and dark, really driven home for me with the lines about fireflies. :)